The scent of a woman!

It was a beautiful morning, with the cool breeze blowing from the window of her room… the breeze carried with it the scent of lilies that they’d just planted in their garden a few days ago… she turned her side away from the window and tried hard to sleep. But here was the scent she couldn’t ignore.. the smell of freshly brewed coffee by her mother.. with her eyes closed she could see her mother sitting by the kitchen table sipping coffee with her legs curled up and head slightly tilted…

She dragged herself out of her bed and tip toed out in the kitchen… she hugged her mother from behind and was almost instantly hit byΒ the scent so familiar to her… the scent of her mother… this smell had not changed in all of her six years of life… the smell of her hair, her sari, the sweat on her forehead from working in the kitchen… this scent was home to her!

Her mother smiled and took her six year old in her lap and cuddled for a while… she reminded her mother of her promise from the previous night to set-up her doll house for her… she knew her mother always kept her word…

How naive could she be! Little did she know that her mother was about to betray her in a few hours..

While looking through the debris, trying to find her mother, she was once again hit by the same scent..only this time she was not sure if it was really her.. because this time the scent was overpowered by the stench of blood, dust and cement…the blast had numbed her ear drums but not her sense of smell…

That day she did not lose her mother, she lost her home!

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This is in response to the daily prompt “Scent” from The Daily Post..

Love!

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56 Responses to The scent of a woman!

  1. Sangbad says:

    Beautiful response…

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  2. The story took a tragic unexpected turn, bit emotionally cruel….

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  3. nkdwhtguy says:

    Wow…I was not expecting the ending. Well written.

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  4. Prajakta says:

    Did not expect that U-turn, Anisha! Great take on the prompt.

    Liked by 3 people

  5. A hard hitting one. Very tragic in the end. Well composed !

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  6. Dahlia says:

    Very well penned Anisha

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  7. Beautifully written, and a hard hitting post on the realities of today’s world, where little children bear the brunt of the follies of their elders …

    Liked by 4 people

  8. Margarita says:

    Powerful. Thought provoking. Compassion evoking. πŸ˜‰ xoM

    Liked by 3 people

  9. Canuck Carl says:

    Wow, I did not see that coming. Extremely well written!

    Liked by 3 people

  10. shreyans says:

    what an unexpected turn…
    written very well..
    shreyans

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  11. That picture made me cry. Awesome post

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  12. the end was un-expected πŸ™‚ good job!

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  13. Judy Redic says:

    Great article. I just didn’t see the ending coming, but it is what it is.
    I had the honor to nominate you to this one, kindly check it out.
    https://myjourney29site.wordpress.com/2017/02/05/the-mystery-blogger-award/

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  14. Lavinia Coutinho says:

    Omg Anisha !!! How on earth did you conceive such a story… Beautifully written and very emotional…

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  15. femvestige says:

    Very interesting composition! I wasn’t sure if I liked the use of the ellipsis. Sometimes they can become overused or used incorrectly. I see that it worked well with the ever-changing thought process of a small child; how a thought can just…drift.

    I wonder if you could increase the power of the piece by leaving out the use of the word ‘mother,’ and leave it a mystery until the end. The scent of a woman… she could be any woman. She could be a sister, a friend, an aunt. But a mother…. the loss of a mother is so poignant.

    Beautiful prompt, and an excellent way to show some of the more devastating parts of our world that many like to pretend is nonexistent or not happening. Brava!

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    • Anisha says:

      Thanks a lot… I was myself not sure of the extent of subtlety I wanted in the post… just let my thoughts flow… and yeah keeping the mother a mystery would’ve been nice… thanks a lottt for the wonderful inputs 😘

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  17. Sasha says:

    Hello Anisha!Found a way to land here.Glad to meet you!You have a simple and amazing blog!Looking forward to read more of your Writings!

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  18. Welcome to that little voice and thank you for following my blog.

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  19. prinxy says:

    beautifully written Anisha… you are indeed a great writer, with a unique perspective .. Your writes are different, and great… continue to be you dear…. thanks for sharing this touching post…. lots of love

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  20. thinkinkadia says:

    Ouch! That hurts… For me such children are real.
    If it’s not based on a real event, you came pretty close.

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  21. thinkinkadia says:

    Yes. I met some and they have been unforgettable

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